Double-take challenge by Janne
Mar. 24th, 2005 12:30 am580 words of mild F/K. Wow, this is really scary, I've gone all weak at the elbows. (I mean posting this is scary, the ficlet isn't at all. I hope.)
Apologies if I do this wrong, I've only had lj for 3 days. Checked for egregious errors by the kind and lovely Regina.
Sometimes Fraser wished that someone had thought to dissuade Turnbull from ever becoming a member of the RCMP, or at the very least had stationed him a very long way from Chicago and himself. He was usually slightly ashamed of such thoughts since Turnbull undoubtedly tried very hard and always had the best intentions. But as his latest good intention had led directly to Fraser’s current ridiculous and embarrassing situation, the kindest thought he could spare for the hapless constable was a fervent prayer for him to somehow go back in time and be devoured by bears as a child, thus preventing today’s events from ever occurring.
On the bright side, Fraser had managed to insist that the dignity of the RCMP required more privacy than had been initially suggested. The tent at least spared him the embarrassment of an audience, though he had to admit that this had proved to be a decidedly mixed blessing. Altogether it had been a most trying morning and Fraser was more than ready for a break. He dropped down into the chair Turnbull had provided, grateful for some time alone to regain his composure.
Fraser was unprepared for Ray to suddenly arrive in front of him, wearing the determined look that usually only surfaced when he was hot on the trail of hardened criminals. “Unprepared” gave way to “completely astonished”, however, when Ray moved forward and simply slid down into his lap, thighs straddling his and warm weight holding him in place.
Such unanticipated behaviour really required some kind of explanation, but he was too interested in the look in Ray’s eyes to think of asking for one. He’d known his partner cared for him, of course, but how had he never noticed how intense it was? How had he never seen this? He couldn’t even spare a thought to the likely expression on his own face, he was so absorbed by what he could now see, a desire he had never dared to hope for suddenly within reach.
He realised his hands had somehow moved to rest on Ray’s waist and curve round one lean thigh just as he felt a strong hand cup the back of his neck, bracelet cool against his skin and fingers stroking gently at the nape. His breath caught, seeming loud in the concentrated silence of the tent and he watched rapt as Ray dropped his gaze to his mouth. He licked suddenly dry lips and saw Ray tense and flush before he locked eyes with Fraser again, looking hesitant for the first time since his arrival.
“Yeah?”
The unexpectedness of the question almost made Fraser jump in surprise. Apparently his emotions weren’t spread as blatantly across his face for Ray to see as he had thought they must be. The husky sound of that one short word made him shiver and he had to swallow hard before answering.
“Yes.”
His own voice was nearly as rough as Ray’s and he saw Ray shiver in turn as delight and heat replaced hesitation. Then finally, finally Ray was leaning in to kiss him, slight sweet-coffee-salt taste and soft warm lips against his as Fraser’s arms wrapped around his back and pulled them tightly together.
Fraser must really remember to compliment Turnbull later on his initiative. He hadn’t thought so when the Inspector had ordered his cooperation and presence this morning, but the “Kiss a Mountie for Charity” tent at the fair truly had been a most marvellous idea.
Apologies if I do this wrong, I've only had lj for 3 days. Checked for egregious errors by the kind and lovely Regina.
Sometimes Fraser wished that someone had thought to dissuade Turnbull from ever becoming a member of the RCMP, or at the very least had stationed him a very long way from Chicago and himself. He was usually slightly ashamed of such thoughts since Turnbull undoubtedly tried very hard and always had the best intentions. But as his latest good intention had led directly to Fraser’s current ridiculous and embarrassing situation, the kindest thought he could spare for the hapless constable was a fervent prayer for him to somehow go back in time and be devoured by bears as a child, thus preventing today’s events from ever occurring.
On the bright side, Fraser had managed to insist that the dignity of the RCMP required more privacy than had been initially suggested. The tent at least spared him the embarrassment of an audience, though he had to admit that this had proved to be a decidedly mixed blessing. Altogether it had been a most trying morning and Fraser was more than ready for a break. He dropped down into the chair Turnbull had provided, grateful for some time alone to regain his composure.
Fraser was unprepared for Ray to suddenly arrive in front of him, wearing the determined look that usually only surfaced when he was hot on the trail of hardened criminals. “Unprepared” gave way to “completely astonished”, however, when Ray moved forward and simply slid down into his lap, thighs straddling his and warm weight holding him in place.
Such unanticipated behaviour really required some kind of explanation, but he was too interested in the look in Ray’s eyes to think of asking for one. He’d known his partner cared for him, of course, but how had he never noticed how intense it was? How had he never seen this? He couldn’t even spare a thought to the likely expression on his own face, he was so absorbed by what he could now see, a desire he had never dared to hope for suddenly within reach.
He realised his hands had somehow moved to rest on Ray’s waist and curve round one lean thigh just as he felt a strong hand cup the back of his neck, bracelet cool against his skin and fingers stroking gently at the nape. His breath caught, seeming loud in the concentrated silence of the tent and he watched rapt as Ray dropped his gaze to his mouth. He licked suddenly dry lips and saw Ray tense and flush before he locked eyes with Fraser again, looking hesitant for the first time since his arrival.
“Yeah?”
The unexpectedness of the question almost made Fraser jump in surprise. Apparently his emotions weren’t spread as blatantly across his face for Ray to see as he had thought they must be. The husky sound of that one short word made him shiver and he had to swallow hard before answering.
“Yes.”
His own voice was nearly as rough as Ray’s and he saw Ray shiver in turn as delight and heat replaced hesitation. Then finally, finally Ray was leaning in to kiss him, slight sweet-coffee-salt taste and soft warm lips against his as Fraser’s arms wrapped around his back and pulled them tightly together.
Fraser must really remember to compliment Turnbull later on his initiative. He hadn’t thought so when the Inspector had ordered his cooperation and presence this morning, but the “Kiss a Mountie for Charity” tent at the fair truly had been a most marvellous idea.
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Date: 2005-03-24 11:13 am (UTC)Love the kissyface! Mmm, nice.
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Date: 2005-03-24 01:23 am (UTC)Very nice!
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Date: 2005-03-24 02:10 am (UTC)I loved every single word of it - you need to write more! This is fantastic!!
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Date: 2005-03-24 11:31 am (UTC)The latest Royal wedding smuggling would depend on how he feels about the whole divorcee issue.
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Date: 2005-03-24 11:41 am (UTC)Half the credit for the twist has to go to Regina as without her comments it would have been much less twisty and much more plain confusing!
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Date: 2005-03-24 11:51 am (UTC)Anyway, I'm v. glad you liked it. (I've been lurking at you lj for a bit because your Callum love usually brightens my day significantly, and god your stories are hot, and wow, "Bent" is terrific and I'll stop babbling at you now...)
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Date: 2005-03-24 12:05 pm (UTC)This is just so perfectly them
Phew. I think that trying to get the characters to feel right is probably the hardest thing about fanfiction. I know how much it bugs me to read something where they don't, so your comment just made me go all bouncy.
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Date: 2005-03-24 12:12 pm (UTC)Oh well, welcome to my world. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Date: 2005-03-24 02:07 pm (UTC)I wonder if Turnbull also toook a turn receiving kisses for charity?
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Date: 2005-03-24 04:41 pm (UTC)And thanks for the compliment.
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Date: 2005-03-24 03:44 pm (UTC)His own voice was nearly as rough as Ray’s and he saw Ray shiver in turn as delight and heat replaced hesitation. Then finally, finally Ray was leaning in to kiss him, slight sweet-coffee-salt taste and soft warm lips against his as Fraser’s arms wrapped around his back and pulled them tightly together.
::sigh::
btw: Love you icon! Is it Scotland's Eileen Donan Castle?
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Date: 2005-03-24 04:37 pm (UTC)Heh. Couldn't agree more! Thanks for the sigh, too.
Maybe I should suggest Mountie kissage for the next Red Nose Day. I'm sure it would raise a lot.
Yes, my icon is Eilean Donan - probably the most photographed castle in Scotland. If you've seen Highlander, it's where the Clan MacLeod leave from to fight the Frasers and I think it was in the series too. They also use it as a base for the secret service in The World is Not Enough. I'm impressed you recognise it just from that little pic - I'm not sure I would have if I didn't already know!
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Date: 2005-03-24 05:53 pm (UTC)I was there and it's a beautiful place!
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Date: 2005-03-25 06:51 am (UTC)... Maybe I can send you the clip, give me some time to work it out cuz I'm not at home and my friend got the clip anyway!
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Date: 2005-03-24 06:27 pm (UTC)bears Squeee so funny
Date: 2005-03-24 08:48 pm (UTC)"the kindest thought he could spare for the hapless constable was a fervent prayer for him to somehow go back in time and be devoured by bears as a child"
Hee thats funny mauled by bears or eaten by bears just sounds so funny
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Date: 2005-03-25 03:06 am (UTC)And congrats, I've been lurking a lot longer and have never managed to post myself, so go you!
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Date: 2005-04-02 10:00 am (UTC)Thankyou very much - glad you enjoyed it!
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