Broken challenge by slidellra

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

Of the "somebody had to do it" variety. <100 words in which, um, seven or eight things are broken. F/K, PG. omphale23 looked at an earlier version of this for me.




A kiss, utterly unexpected, overwhelmingly soft and rough and real and now and...

"Shit, oh shit. Sorry--I didn't mean--I won't. I swear, Fraser."

Fraser's previous record from desk to office door was 2.3 seconds, and that time a child's life had been at stake.

The sound Ray made when Fraser caught him, and, happier, those he made later.

Fraser's left bootlace wouldn't give, wouldn't.

The vase blocked the window, and the window was Dief's exit.

The cot was on its last legs anyway. The desk chair was something of a surprise.


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Comments

[luzula]

Oh, I like! It's like little pieces of a puzzle.

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

Thanks, hon! I'm so very glad it worked for you.

[nos4a2no9.livejournal.com]

Veeeeery clever. I had to re-read a couple of times because I didn't get it (and that's because I is dumb, not because normal folks couldn't figure it out). And oh, the image of the broken cot *and* the chair. These boys do such crazy things when they're in love.

Great job, hon!

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

Hee! It's diabolical and sneaky, it is.

They really, really do. Crazy and physical and forceful things. Inappropriate for the workplace hot things. Yeah...What was I saying?

[primroseburrows.livejournal.com]

"Shit, oh shit. Sorry--I didn't mean--I won't. I swear, Fraser."

I love this line. :D

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

YAY! Thank you.

[j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com]

The desk chair was something of a surprise.

As they so often are.

Lovely! and the last line made me chuckle. Fraser's explanation to Inspector Thatcher should be very interesting. :)

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

Hooray! Thanks so much. I imagine more things get broken during that conversation, yes.

[bluebrocade.livejournal.com]

I remember commenting on this saying how I loved it and how brilliant it was. And yet, I don't see a comment from me. O.o

So, anyway...I LOVE THIS. IT'S JUST BRILLIANT!! ♥

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

*beams madly* I think you did, but it was a reply seconding somebody else's comment. I accept BOTH with great pleasure. Thank you!

[bertybertle.livejournal.com]

I LOVE this. It's clever and funny. Kudos!

[kari-hermione.livejournal.com]

The cot was on its last legs anyway. The desk chair was something of a surprise.

*Giggle* Just what I needed to read while waiting for cookies to be done! Thank you! *Uses special RayK/Benton icon*

[slidellra.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.

Also, cookies, yay.