On the way to the Lee Valley Store...
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...to buy clamps for Jim's brother's birthday ("You can Never Have Too Many Clamps" is the motto of these men), I had a sick, twisted idea. What would happen if Dirty Dancing met Grey Owl?
By the way, the idea has no connection to the fact I was going to buy clamps. In case you're wondering.
I suppose this is AU. And it's NC-17, and it's WAY over the limit, like over 5000 words over (!), so I stuck it on my site instead:
Dancing Bear
By the way, the idea has no connection to the fact I was going to buy clamps. In case you're wondering.
I suppose this is AU. And it's NC-17, and it's WAY over the limit, like over 5000 words over (!), so I stuck it on my site instead:
Dancing Bear
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Date: 2003-06-30 04:11 pm (UTC)Hee! I think it's definitely a Guy Thing.
The ending is bittersweet
Yeah, ticked me off. I don't mind *reading* bittersweet, but I hate *writing* it!
Glad you liked it!
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Date: 2003-06-30 03:17 pm (UTC)::whimper::
Damn, you're good.
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Date: 2003-06-30 03:18 pm (UTC)Me, I'd vote definitely AU -- I don't see how, with the exception of major head injuries for the both of them, they could have forgotten that summer and each other! :-)
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Date: 2003-06-30 04:15 pm (UTC)Lovely!
Date: 2003-06-30 03:52 pm (UTC)Re: Lovely!
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Date: 2003-06-30 05:54 pm (UTC)I'm a sucker for bittersweet endings...love reading them, try to write them but have a hard time writing the bitter.
This was really gorgeous! I loved Ray paying the five bucks for the two condoms and then getting the lotion...He wanted something special to remember and he wanted to make sure Ben had something special to remember, too. *sigh* Really nice stuff!
As for the clamps, I have no idea what kind of clamps they are, but being the sick and twisted soul I am, my brain went 'you can never have too many nipple clamps? you can only use two at a time...'
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Date: 2003-06-30 07:17 pm (UTC)I just don't *do* bitter, though I love to read it. But this couldn't end any other way, somehow. Ugh.
Glad you liked it (in a sniffly sort of way)!
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Date: 2003-06-30 07:40 pm (UTC)This is where my brain gave up all higher function.
Benton hoisted himself from the lake and shook like a husky, splattering water all over the rocks.
Guh.
And this made me laugh.
Here I am, staring at the Eighth Wonder of the World, and all I can think to do is cover him up with graffiti.
And this was just a wonderful image.
He didn't care if the dance wasn't a real Indian dance. Or if the guy wasn't a real Indian. Or if the whole fucking town folded up at night into a big vinyl suitcase.
And, and, and--I could go on and on. Wonderful work, just wonderful.
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Date: 2003-07-01 03:16 am (UTC)*g* The story has achieved its purpose!
Thanks for your kind comments.
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Date: 2003-07-01 03:26 am (UTC)Wouldn't that be cool? The alternate S3/4. Or maybe they run into each other on the street like Fraser & Victoria.
(clamping hands over ears) NOOO! STOP...THE...VOICES!!!
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Date: 2003-06-30 09:10 pm (UTC)Shriek! (throws arms around lamardeuse) I love you! That's terrific and kind of nuts, which is exactly the way I LOVE me my DS! Heee!
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Date: 2003-07-01 03:34 am (UTC)Yes, I think your wonderful left-field outlook has infiltrated my brain, but then this show encourages us, doesn't it? *g* I just had to think of a way for them to be together, and then it started...summer...summer camp...hotel...eeek!
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Date: 2003-06-30 09:25 pm (UTC)Not to mention the lake scene was nnnnnnnnnnng.
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Date: 2003-07-01 03:36 am (UTC)That is completely ripped off a scene in Grey Owl, with Pierce Brosnan. The images just seeped into my head, and I had to write this monster to get them out again! *g* Glad you enjoyed the de-seeping process.
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Date: 2003-07-01 06:54 am (UTC)"The night we met."
"The night I was an asshole, you mean," the young man chuckled.
Very purely Ray. He doesn't mean to be an asshole, always...it just happens. I also was particularly taken with the image of RAy fighting his way through the trees in the dark, cursing and making enough noise to wake the dead.
And I love this description of Ray:
Ray was a wildfire in his arms, one which could not be quenched by a lake or an ocean or every damned drop of water on the planet. Benton tried to hold him, but he was unconquerable, sliding and pressing and pushing against him in sensuous movements that felt like dancing, or fighting.
You get it, right there: that's Ray, perfectly. But larmardeuse! The ending! So damn sad! I love Ray talking around what he's trying to say, finally coming up with this:
"Shit," Ray whispered. "I wasn't expecting you."
Wow. You're as good at sad endings as you are at happy ones.
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Date: 2003-07-01 08:15 am (UTC)I know! I know! I don't understand what the hell's the matter with me. Maybe I should look into medication. I hear M&M's are good.
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Date: 2003-07-01 05:03 pm (UTC)I'd love to read a longer tale of young Ray and Fraser's adventures at the resort. This was very cool.
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Date: 2003-07-01 05:16 pm (UTC)*g* You won't hear any objections from me! Thanks!
As for a longer story...by the time I knew it would be a sad ending (about halfway through), I just wanted it to be OVER with so I could experience my pain and put it behind me! *g* I'm so wussy about unhappy endings.